Demons & Prophets

Discussion in 'All Discussions' started by sisurfdogg, Jul 13, 2014.

  1. sisurfdogg

    sisurfdogg Well-Known Member

    Jun 17, 2013
    I'm going in for surgery in a week, so I wanted to put this out there. It's a tale of the seeker and his journey to find the lost child within the gates of the drowned city. It's a story of love and light trying to vanquish the forces of darkness and decay. There are a couple of half assed surf scenes in it, so please bear with me.

    Chapter 1.

    Battered and Banished

    Storm tossed by the angry sea, adrift, lost, alone. and scared.
    Illuminated from above by hellish bolts of cobalt,
    Sizzling and hissing and then, BOOM,
    The ozone envelopes him and the hairs on his arms stand up,
    As soldiers at attention before battle at the break of dawn.

    Battered by waves in the angry sea,
    Tossed about on a tiny craft,
    Land a distant notion,
    A far flung dream.

    Draamanu clinging to the gunnels,
    Draamanu retching bile and foam back at the cursed ocean.
    Draamanu praying to the ancient gods of wind and water.
     
  2. MY SAVIOR

    MY SAVIOR Well-Known Member

    259
    Feb 21, 2014
    Be praying for yah sisurfdogg
     

  3. sisurfdogg

    sisurfdogg Well-Known Member

    Jun 17, 2013
    Thanks brother.

    Chapter 2

    Illumination and Pain

    Searing hot sun, singular torch, ball of fury, white taunting source of life.
    "How, why does it hate me?," Draamanu cries thru parched salt caked lips,
    Swollen lips that thirst for water,
    Swollen lips that ache for food,
    Salty dry flaps wishing for the sweet taste of discourse.
    "Someone hear my cry", Draamanu yells to the seven directions.

    Beseeching the east, Draamanu pleads for illumination, for knowledge, for bearing, so he may return home.
    A mighty eagle parts the sun and with a piercing cry of triumph, swoops down and snatches Draamanu with his steely talons.
    All breath leaves, all life ebbs, Draamanu soaring, then slipping,
    Falling down, down, down, back into the angry sea.

    Immediately plucked up by a small reedy vessel. paddled by a lone brown figure,
    Draamanu cries in agony as the demon's hand grabs his arm and lifts him out of the ocean,
    It's touch burning his flesh.
    "You seek illumination, you seek knowledge, you haughty child", yells Malekrakon,
    The writhing creature that was once a man but is now certainly not.
     
  4. sisurfdogg

    sisurfdogg Well-Known Member

    Jun 17, 2013
    Chapter 3

    Prophesy of the Lost Child

    Raped and forgotten, his soul a pool of remorse.
    Draamanu cries and begs for release from the searing pain of the demon's touch.
    "Providence", Your holy light, rescue me from this cursed night,
    Draamanu implores the heavens,

    Thru the mist of an apparition is revealed, a pale ghostly figure surrounded by eerie luminescence.
    Unbearable radiance blinds Draamanu,
    Shielding his eyes.

    "Seek the lost child and it will be found within the gates of the drowned city",
    Solomajellian the prophet implores.
    "You must leave at once, seek the warm green lands.
    There in lies the ancient city on the banks of a mighty river
    That flows like a snake
    Thru the lands of the lost souls".

    Chapter 4

    Blinded by the awesome light of the ancient prophet was it a dream?
    Draamanu cries out to the gods of the south.
    "Oh, warm gentle breezes, bring me healing,
    Bring me innocence,
    Like a rabbit that plays
    In the forbidden garden and
    Feeds from the sacred herbs.

    The trees began to rustle with drops of a fine mist carried
    By a sweet breeze of flowers and honey and exotic spices.
    A melodic murmuring becomes incessant,
    Agonizing, threatening in it insinuation of lust.
    The trees part imperceptibly as the sound ecomes a blanket,
    A morphine mind-masking shroud of perfume and musk.

    Odijrastra, the temptress, descends upon Draamanu
    Like a great bird of prey,
    A succubus that extracts all that is good and pure.
    Draamanu's screams of agony and despair are
    Muffled by her folds of flesh.
     
  5. DawnPatrol321

    DawnPatrol321 Well-Known Member

    Mar 6, 2012
    Not sure what all this stuff is, but good luck on your surgery. Hope it's nothing too serious.
     
  6. ClemsonSurf

    ClemsonSurf Well-Known Member

    Dec 10, 2007

    Pics or it didn't happen.
     
  7. sisurfdogg

    sisurfdogg Well-Known Member

    Jun 17, 2013
    DawnPartolSUP and zaGaffer - thanks for the positive energy! Clemmy, I wish I knew how to scan and upload the illustrations my buddy Josh Quick did, they are fantastic and otherworldly images of doom and rapture. Maybe I'll figure it out. I'm getting a tumor (benign) removed from my salivary gland, it's about the size of a golf ball. They say in 3 weeks or so I can resume "normal" activities. Hopefully I can get out there in September when we usually start to get H swells. Thanks again for all the good wishes, they are appreciated.
     
  8. Zeroevol

    Zeroevol Well-Known Member

    Jun 22, 2009
    Good luck man, hope for a quick recovery!
     
  9. Betty

    Betty Well-Known Member

    Oct 14, 2012
    Good luck dog! I hope they let you have Versed or nitrous. Both good stuff.
     
  10. DawnPatrol321

    DawnPatrol321 Well-Known Member

    Mar 6, 2012
    You're welcome dude, glad it's nothing too serious and you'll be back in the water soon, take care.
     
  11. Koki Barrels

    Koki Barrels Well-Known Member

    Aug 14, 2008
    Good luck, Dogg....hope everything goes well.

    Solid post, me being ZGaff and all, I like those two stanzas to.

    Thought I'd tell you twice.
     
  12. yankee

    yankee Well-Known Member

    Sep 26, 2008
    Nice post, SIsurfin-dawg. Although the stanza about being raped, ah, maybe not so much.

    And smooth sailing with the surgery. Make sure you get some good narcotic post-op painkillers to mix with your gin & tonics. :rolleyes:

    Back in the ocean before you can say haiku-you-muthaflugggers.
     
  13. Koki Barrels

    Koki Barrels Well-Known Member

    Aug 14, 2008
    I'm pretty sure that's why Wayne posted so quickly, he uses that line...
     
  14. yankee

    yankee Well-Known Member

    Sep 26, 2008
    Glad to see you back, Koki. The Forum hasn't been the same without ya.
     
  15. sisurfdogg

    sisurfdogg Well-Known Member

    Jun 17, 2013
    Mucho Grass y ass for the props. I hope they give me some good stuff too. You'll are awesome. If I have any left afterwards.....

    Chapter 5

    Seeking Strength

    Draamanu succumbs to lack of air and blacks out into
    An ayss of longing, remorse and humiliation.
    Sirens, wailing, gnashing, give way to dull roar
    Reverberating, filling giant canvas sails taut against the wind.

    Facing west, looking within his own heartbreak and despair,
    Draamanu pleads, "Give me strength,
    Oh bastards of fate, you who toy with life
    As a game of chess, a necessary elimination.
    Let me fulfill my destiny, meet my muse,
    Save the world and find the lost child
    In the forgotten drowned city."

    A giant whirlpool forms offshore the barrier reef,
    And then a wave, a towering wall of water,
    A sea change of upheaval,
    Lifts, sucks, throws, overcomes all form.
    Zuru appears, in his malevolent glory, then merges with the whirlpool.
    Draamanu is overpowered by the demons fury.
    All goes dark, lightless, totally black,
    Blacker than the darkest night.

    Chapter 6

    Naked

    Jyrascar, the trickster, the contrary teacher,
    The coyote spirit of upheaval, appears unto Draamanu
    On the other side of the vortex.
    "purify your soul of all desire and what you seek shall appear.
    You must give to gain."

    Draamanu weeps tears of remorse,
    For the longing he never had,
    All the lost love he never knew.
    A cold harsh wind howls from the north and rattles
    The bones of the dead.

    All unwanted things cease to be.
    All his clothes are stripped bare,
    His hair denuded by arctic blast, until
    Draamanu naked, bald, frozen is exposed to no one.
    But exposed none the less and lost and forgotten.
     
  16. Sandblasters

    Sandblasters Well-Known Member

    May 4, 2013
    good game hope your surgery goes well, idk wtf those hyku things are? there not in english.
     
  17. MY SAVIOR

    MY SAVIOR Well-Known Member

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    Feb 21, 2014
  18. Koki Barrels

    Koki Barrels Well-Known Member

    Aug 14, 2008
    Thanks, yankee. I'll give you a hand with the dousche canoes, been hung up on a couple streets in town...but my sites come up here soon.

    Lmao....sandblasters, you rock!

    Wayne, I was at church the other day and during the sermon the priest said no one who has done meth or crack rock can enter the Kingdom of God no matter if they quit or not. Sucks for you, dude.
     
    Last edited: Jul 15, 2014
  19. yankee

    yankee Well-Known Member

    Sep 26, 2008
    Oh, man. Koki is back with a vengeance. :D
     
  20. beachbreak

    beachbreak Well-Known Member

    Apr 7, 2008
    I think it's gunwales not gunnels